<p>Assignment - What must we do to truly understand ourselves ?
Essay -
The idea of understanding oneself is a vague one, and the process to such self actualization seems even more vague . However, it can be done. New experiences shed light on things one never knew about oneself and this helps him to understand himself . Evidence of this is seen in the life of Apple’s founder Steve Jobs , in the movie ‘Django Unchained’ , and in the story of Bilbo Baggins .
Apple’s founder Steve Jobs is a good example of a person who seemed at peace with himself, and self actualized . During his youth , he went to college , even though it was very expensive and did not seem to hold many benefits to him .Subsequently, he quit after a year, as he felt it was a waste of money . This decision unencumbered him to pursue his real passions, as well as hobbies he was interested in , and it was this decision that led him to start the now billion dollar company Apple. The time that he took for himself after quitting college was the factor that helped him understand what he really wanted to do.
Just as new experiences helped Steve jobs become what he was , a similar example can be taken from the movie ‘Django Unchained’ . In the movie , Django was a slave in the years before the Civil War .he had his freedom , and basic rights taken away from him , as well as his beloved wife . The torture and tribulations he and his wife had to go through was an enlightening experience for him . He finally decided that what was happening to his people was wrong and decided to take a stand for it . He did this by freeing his wife from the clutches of her master , killing him and escaping ; his acts lighting the fire of what would become the Civil War .
From the examples of Django and Steve Jobs , one can see that new experiences are indeed the key to understanding oneself . It helps a person to understand his as well as other’s perspectives in a better way and see them in a different light . This formulates a stronger and more resolute opinion of one’s perspective of the world , and ultimately oneself .</p>
<p>Great start! Good use of vocabulary but watch for punctuation(not as important in a written test). Try to simplify your message. Finally, don’t mention Mr. Baggins then fail to talk about him. Keep working!!</p>
<p>OP, I wanted to read your post, but could not get through it. I kept getting distracted by an error that immediately stuck out at me, but which I first thought was a single typo. You are leaving a space between the end of each sentence and the punctuation that goes with it. You must be careful to avoid such things. This is grammatically incorrect.</p>
<p>Score: 0/12</p>
<p>You did not address the topic question in any way.</p>
<p>@Rebound … yeah thats become a habit , but i don’t do it on paper … and @muaythaiguy … didn’t i say that new experiences are what one must do to truly understand oneself , and provide examples to support it ?</p>
<p>The question was What must we do to truly understand ourselves? You did not say anything about what people must do to understand themselves. This is what you wrote about: “new experiences shed light on things one never knew about oneself”</p>
<p>Actually the complete sentence was “New experiences shed light on things one never knew about oneself and this helps him to understand himself .” </p>
<p>and in the last para i said " From the examples of Django and Steve Jobs , one can see that new experiences are indeed the key to understanding oneself . It helps a person to understand his as well as other’s perspectives in a better way and see them in a different light . This formulates a stronger and more resolute opinion of one’s perspective of the world , and ultimately oneself ."</p>
<p>I know i could have said it more clearly … and i will lose points for that but … i did say it .</p>
<p>Thanks for your grading anyway .</p>
<p>So you’re saying that the only place you discussed the essay question was in the conclusion? I stand by the score I gave you.</p>
<p>Yes , I admit that talking about it only in the conclusion was wrong , and i accept your grade . 
However I don’t think i repeated the mistake in the next essay i wrote .
Here it is -
Assignment : Do society’s rules limit our decisions such that our choices are not freely made ?</p>
<p>My essay -
The rules by which a society lives can seem convoluted and restricting, such that many feel that the freedom which people have a right to, is more limiting than freeing .However , in the dangerous society we live in,such rules are necessary.But to think that the rules restrict the choices a person has is wrong. In such circumstances,strong hearted and brave people rise up and protest in such a way that they ultimately change the rules of their society . Evidence of this is seen in the recent events concerning gay marriage . and in the rise of the music genre called heavy metal .
In the past decade ,the subject of homosexuality has been a highly controversial one,with many protests occurring all over the world for the rights of homosexuals to marry . If one considers the past five hundred years , there has been a lot of progress. Before , homosexuals who had the courage to admit to their sexual orientation,were condemned completely by society,and in many cases even killed .However, when they started fighting for their rights ,people had to ultimately accept that these people are in fact normal , and have the same rights to freedom as anyone else . Here,it is seen that by standing for their rights, homosexuals were able to change society’s rules to accommodate their needs,as is seen in the legalization of gay marriage in many states in the U.S.
Society’s rules have had an effect on music too . In the 1960’s, in the wake of the conception of heavy metal,there existed many people who simply did not like it, and in turn condemned it . Fans of bands like Black Sabbath, Led Zeppelin and Judas Priest were subjugated to criticism by others in society,who claimed that such music promoted violence and was unhealthy.However,these bands ignored such criticisms,and are still ,in fact, very popular among thousands of fans,who have ignored society’s imprecations and continued to listen to what they wanted to .
Thus,it can be clearly seen that people who want to do something and do not care for society’s judgement are ultimately recognised by society in such a way that their perceptions and outlooks are taken into account as well .From the examples of homosexuality and heavy metal , it is clearly seen that society’s rules do not restrict our choices , as long as the peoples follow through regardless of other’s opinions . This is possible because society does in fact consist of different people who have different interests and ideas</p>