Grapes of Wrath--Research Paper

<p>Hey, could someone please critque the intro and first body para of my GOW Research Paper.
My assigned topic is “The most admirable aspect of TGOW is…”
THE most stupid topic ever…but whatever. </p>

<p>The Grapes of Wrath: A Universal Novel</p>

<p>During the 1930s, thousands of Americans migrated from Oklahoma to California to escape the drought, debt, and desolation of the Dust Bowl. Though The Grapes of Wrath (GW) is a story about the Joad family, it is also evocative of the socioeconomic hardships of the Great Depression and the experiences of migrant workers. The most admirable aspect of Steinbeck’s novel is its universality: the Joads’ experience is representational of the collective difficulties faced by migrant workers during this time period. </p>

<pre><code>The shifting point of view throughout The Grapes of Wrath emphasizes the inhumane treatment of migrants. The Joads are first cautioned of the mistreatment they are poised to face when they meet a fellow Oklahoman who is returning from California having been incapable of make a decent living. The man informs the Joads of the meaning of the nickname Okie: "Okie use’ta mean you was from Oklahoma. Now it means you’re a dirty son-of a-*****,? he bitterly explains, “Okie means you’re scum” (GW 206). The knowledge of the negative connotation of this moniker enlightens the Joads to discrimination they will face upon arrival in California. Literary critic Mimi Reisel notes that the prejudice against Oklahomans is further underscored by Steinbeck when he explores the Californian point of view and “has his service station boy say, ‘Them goddamn Okies got no sense and no feeling. They ain’t human. A human wouldn’t live like they do. A human being couldn’t stand it to be so dirty and miserable. They ain’t a hell of a lot better than gorillas.’” (130). The universal irony of this negative stereotyping is that migrants were treated poorly and were subsequently ridiculed for their paltry living situations (Reisel 130). The irony of negative stereotyping is reiterated when, in Chapter 19 of The Grapes of Wrath, an anonymous Californian declares of Okies: “‘Sure they talk the same language, but they ain’t the same. Look how they live. Think any of us folks’d live like that? Hell no!’” (236). This remark intensifies Steinbeck’s portrayal of “the mood of Californians during this period and their hostile attitude toward drought refugees,” and “leaves little doubt that the Oklahomans are perceived as aliens, not countrymen.” (Reisel 126). Next, the author shifts his attention to the Oklahoman reaction to this prejudice: “Ma’s advance stopped. She looked puzzled. ‘Okies??’ she said softly. ‘Okies.’/ She hesitated a long time–This here policeman–he called us–‘Okies.’ He says, ‘We don’ want you goddamn Okies settlin’ down.‘’” (GW 214-215). Though the “policeman” is a single character, his views are representative of the majority of the Californian population. This suggests that Ma Joad’s puzzlement and hesitation is also representative of the shock felt by the thousands of migrants exposed to such discrimination. Steinbeck’s utilization of point of view to demonstrate the intolerance experienced by the Joads buttresses the universality of stereotypes in society.
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<p>Edit: I love how they censored the “b.i.t.c.h.” in one of the quotes, haha.</p>

<p>Some things that I noticed…</p>

<p>1.) Wordiness
"The knowledge of the negative connotation of this moniker enlightens the Joads to discrimination they will face upon arrival in California. "
Sometimes long words sound pretty… but they just clutter sentences up. I suffered from the same problem, and my English teacher freshman year tore apart my papers. Try to be more concise.</p>

<p>2.) Staying on-topic
I feel like you skip around in the first paragraph. Your topic sentence is “The shifting point of view throughout The Grapes of Wrath emphasizes the inhumane treatment of migrants.” Although I agree that Steinbeck’s utilization of ‘Okie’ supports your thesis, you don’t really address the ‘point of view’ portion of your topic sentence. I can certainly find how you tie it in if I read into certain parts of the paragraph… but in essays, you need to clearly support the topic sentence. Readers should easily be able to figure out WHY point of view ties in with universal stereotypes. The last part of the paragraph (w/ Ma Joad and the policeman) does this the best.</p>

<p>3.) Quotes.
In some cases, you quote too much. Try to only include the parts of a sentence that demonstrate your point. Also try to use more embedded (is this the correct term?) quoting!</p>

<p>Sorry if I sounded too critical. You’re obviously a good writer already though, so I thought you could stand the criticism =)</p>

<p>Start with a quote from the book. Analyzing a quote as an introductory device is much more interesting than “In the 1930s…”</p>

<p>Nice writing and skills. Your work is really dry though. Not all your fault because of the topic you had to do, but I’d add a little personal style…</p>

<p>LesOs, no, I love critical, lol. I hate when people just say its “good,” haha…NOT very helpful.
I emailed it to my english teacher and she had some of the same comments as you, so thats good. </p>

<p>MallomarCookie…She gave us a very specific format. The best way to get a good grade is to follow it. She likes the intros, short and to the point, and doesn’t like quotes in intros. I personally like longer, more detailed intros, but, whatever makes the grade, right?</p>

<p>janemac…yeah, my teacher is very…technical. She wants her format followed meticulously, in terms of I.C.E., no fancy stuff. </p>

<p>It doesn’t help that I have to write about the “most admirable aspect” though, haha, I hated the book. I would have done much better with my opposing topic, I forget the wording, but it was something like “the worst aspect”</p>

<p>bump
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