HELP EDITING ESSAY / OPINIONS

Hi everyone. This is my first draft. It’s about Debate and I would sincerely appreciate opinions, concerns, feedback, editing etc.

Five seconds in and I was already a goner. Public Forum Debate had taken me; Even today, waging wars with words is something that will never lose its allure. Getting my computer slammed shut at 3 AM despite my pleas that the closing argument needs to be changed is something of a weekly ritual. Topic briefs litter my room and multiple forests have been killed in my speech editing. I know more about Algeria’s GDP than last night’s football game, and more than a few peers have given me dirty looks because does someone really need to wear suits that often. I say never mind to those people. Debate is to thank for multiple lost voices, too many friendships to count, and just a couple hours of magic every weekend.

OK, for starters: do NOT post your essay online!!! It opens you up to plagiarism and to accusations that you yourself have plagiarized it from the person who posted it online.

Now, as to your actual paragraph:
What is this the answer to? What’s the prompt?

And, maybe more important, what’s the point? Yep, I get that you love debate. (Me too. I coached it for 18 years, though LD, not Public Forum.) So what? How does this give the colleges a reason to admit you?