<p>Hi parents! I hope that nobody minds me posting in here, but I’ve found that parents give much greater advice than students and I could really use some last minute advice. Anyway, I’ve applied to all of my schools so far except Harvard. For its additional info section, I decided to simply write whatever was on my mind at the time and is usable - I came up with 3 different essays that I am having trouble choosing one to use. My scores are definitely not perfect (or even average if we’re going by CC standards), so I’m counting on the essays. My other essay is funny, anecdotal and stresses diversity, which one gets a feel of from the rest of my application.</p>
<p>I’ve uploaded my three essays here (in case I need to delete them later): <a href=“http://nilubol.interlocked.net/hi/essays.html[/url]”>http://nilubol.interlocked.net/hi/essays.html</a> . There is no need to scrutinize them, but rather I’m just looking for which essay topic would work best with my application. I realize that it’s a rather long read to read three essays, but I would really appreciate it if even a few people helped me.</p>
<p>I like the 2nd essay. It is the essay I want to read more. I would beef up those 3 days more because it’s your triumph and tribulation, and it could be humorous too. I would not use the last one.</p>
<p>The only thing that I like about the last essay is the first paragraph and I was pretty hesitant about including it in the first place. I don’t think I’ll do that one. Thanks. : )</p>
<p>I would not use the first or last one. I would develop the second one further. The first step is to brainstorm what you want the adcoms to know about you. Then, when you write your story, make sure the story shows and reveals those traits about you. Don’t simply just write a nice story. When the reader is done the essay, make sure they can describe some of your characteristics. I agree with oldfort about showing how you handle trials and tribulations (and triumphs). Bring in some humor. Show more about yourself, not just the events.</p>
<p>Second one is by far the best. Make sure it says more about you. What qualities do you have that you want to show? Openness to new activities? Perseverence? Sense of humor? I’m getting hints, but would like more.</p>
<p>Wow, it’s almost unanimously for the second essay–it seems to me that the first essay is the most original and the last one the best written, but to each her own ^.^</p>
<p>The first could risk making you seem superficial, even if it influenced you greatly. In other words, it could translate into the suspicious internet-stalker type of thing, IMHO…realize that the internet culture today is such that many admissions officers will tend to view it in a negative light, if not physically, then subconsciously.</p>
<p>The second one was best and could go great lengths to help your application. Just remember to read it over again and make sure everything sounds exactly the way you want it. Like someone else said, some tweaking needed.</p>
<p>The last one is NOT one you should submit at all. If you had a serious, diagnosed case, then I possibly would have said go for it. But this is not a diagnosed case, and so you should avoid this topic at all costs because it is more disadvantageous than positive.</p>