hey heres my essay, i just finished my rough draft, i know its bad, but i dunno what to improved
feel free to rip me a new one, i need it
<pre><code>Hundreds of people crowded in the room, paying their last respects to this great man. A man everyone loved and respected, a man who had overcome so much, had died. But he was more than just a man to me, he was my grandfather. Though this man has perished from this earth; the morals and values he instilled upon me and others, and the happiness he brought so many is still alive today.
I spent nearly every weekend of my childhood hearing his stories, witnessing his acts of kindness, and seeing the love and respect people showed him. Even from a young age he did more than was required of him, winning a bronze start in World War 2. Rising above the call of duty was something he did outside of war also. He worked longer hours, yet always found time for his family and the community. He ran the Little League Baseball program for decades, did endless charity work for his church, and even took care of his neighbors daughter for nearly two years when her mother had a drug problem. He was an all around good guy: if he saw an injured animal in the street, he would bring it the veterinarian and pay for the treatment; if he saw a homeless person in need of money, hed give them money without a thought.
He was an intelligent man, and couldve probably gone great places and accumulated great wealth; however, this was not what was important to him. Hed rather experience the joy of helping a friend in need, instead of buying that big screen television. He knew what was important in life; being nice and respectful to your fellow man. Money cannot buy happiness, but being loved by the whole community sure does. He showed me this often ignored truth through his many stories and through the many experiences we shared. He taught me to always be kind and benevolent towards all and to always do what is right. Having money is great, but having character is what is important. If it were not for him, I would not be the person I am today. I would be the average misguided intellectual, looking to get rich at any way possible, not respecting my friends and family, and not realizing how to find true happiness