Help with my Essay

<p>I’m writing an essay using topic number 1 from the Common App. I’ve been told that it’s “weak”… could someone help me out? No one from the class of '09, please.</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

<p>PM me. Would like to help :)</p>

<p>Sent. Anyone else? Maybe I should have used a more inventive title, haha.</p>