Help with the NHS Essay

I have to write a compelling essay on why the NHS should choose me. I need your help with the introduction and conclusion. This is the format for my essay:

  • Introductory paragraph
  • Scholarship and character
  • Community service and leadership
  • Conclusion

Many NHS essays start with “The NHS is a prestigious organisation that…” and I want mine to be a little different, perhaps a little more interesting this? I don’t want extravagant language throughout where it gets to the point where the person reading it grows dubious of me. I just need a few poetic sentences or phrases in my introduction and conclusions (for example, I want to learn more, experience more, discover more, not only for myself but everyone around me… or the NHS serves as an ambassador between those who need help and those who can help). Any suggestions? The essay is a major part of my application after teacher recommendations because many people have the adequate grades, service activities, extra curricular activities, and awards/achievements like mine. There is a lot of favouritism that will go into their final decision, and I know all of them love a good essay.

That opening sentence tells why YOU want to join THEM.

The focus should be on YOU-- what do you bring to the table that other candidates might not? Obviously, since we’re strangers, I can’t hope to answer that for you.

List your strongest positive characteristics, then google quotes about them.

But I’m concerned about your mention of favoritism-- why on earth would you say that?