<p>Hi can someone help me with my uc essays please? I am having a difficult time about what else I should write or add to my essay. Please give me your opinions on what you think about my essay.</p>
<p>Criticism is much appreciated. :)</p>
<p>And I know that it’s very short so can I get tips on what else to write or how to make it longer?</p>
<p>Prompt 1:
Word count- 301
War, blood, and death are not what you would expect someone to think about during their teenage years. But due to the Khmer Rouge in the mid 1700’s, this is what both my father and mother faced when they were my age living in Cambodia.</p>
<p>In order to survive, my parents had to flee their homeland and come to America where they began a new life with nothing but the clothes they were wearing. Although my parents had nothing from the start, they would always tell my siblings and me how they are very fortunate and blessed to live in America, a place of freedom and happiness. Seeing how much effort my parents put into making sure that my siblings and I live a comfortable life has shaped me into the person I am today.</p>
<p>Not wanting other people to go through many hardships in life, my parents have also dedicated their time in helping others who have a far disadvantage than them. Whenever my parents visit Cambodia, they will always take their time to help the homeless children whose parents had abandoned them. Now that I am old enough, I hope to be able to help many other people, just like my parents.</p>
<p>Dedicating my time to help others not only makes me feel good about myself but also shows me that doing the littlest good deed can make a big difference in someone’s life. This is why I aspire to become a pediatrician. When I become a pediatrician, I want to be able to visit not only Cambodia but also other countries where children are in need of help. With my help, I hope that I’ll be able to change someone’s life and provide not only a helping hand but to establish a bond that will always be connected throughout the world.</p>
<p>Prompt 2:
Word count- 263
Robert G. Ingersoll once said that “music expresses feeling and thought, without language; it was below and before speech, and it is above and beyond all words.” There are numerous times when I am unable to verbally express my feelings because they are often more overpowering than words. Instead of verbally expressing myself, I will often go to my violin as a source of comfort and solace.</p>
<p>When I first picked up the violin, I was very stiff and uncomfortable because I was afraid to show my feelings and let loose. My teacher would always tell me to be relaxed and to just play with my emotions. This was a very difficult task for me because I don’t like letting my emotions loose for everyone to acknowledge. Although it was a difficult task, I knew that in order to play like a real musician, I had to loosen up. After hours and hours of practice, I was able to become more comfortable with my playing and finally openly express my feelings and thoughts.</p>
<p>Through my violin, I am now able to connect with my inner feelings and express myself more openly and comfortably. Without music, I wouldn’t be able to thoroughly express myself because I would just keep my feelings and thoughts locked up inside. Playing the violin has shown me to not be afraid to express myself and to just live in the moment. With my violin, I hope to continue playing music for others to enjoy and to create the mood that I am feeling not through words but through music. </p>
<p>total word count- 567</p>
<p>Thank you so much!</p>