<p>How can i improve my essay response for 1 of 4 of the essays I wrote for Ball State’s Honors College? I feel like it’s too vague. What should change, remove, or add?</p>
<p>*Provide examples of your creative, artistic, or other unusual talents.</p>
<p>My response:</p>
<p>Immediately after learning to stand on my feet, I was bouncing off the walls. Upon turning four years old, my parents enrolled in a gymnastics class. I instantly fell in love with it and continued to be a gymnast for over 12 years. Freshman year of high school, I joined the diving team, which I attended every day before gymnastics practice, until junior year of high school when I dropped gymnastics to focus more on diving. Thanks to my gymnastics background, I have become successful in diving, which has become my absolute passion. I love the thrill of jumping off the board and fitting in as many somersaults and twists I can before entering the water.</p>