<p>My grades in high school have gotten better every year
Freshman year: 3 B’s
Sophomore year: 2 B’s
Junior year: All A’s
Weighted GPA: 4.0/4.0
Classes for Senior Year:
AP Bio, H English, Statistics [Then at a local community college]:Calculus, Psychology, English, Sociology
^^My school has very limited AP offerings, but I have taken the most available to me</p>
<p>Scores:
SAT CR-600, W-670, M-760
AP’s:
US History-4
European History-4
Biology-Pending</p>
<p>Summer programs:
2005-JHops:study of biotechnology and bioethics (received college credit)
2006-MIT:study of engineering, lasted 6 weeks, very intensive/well-known</p>
<p>Most Significant Stuff:
WPIAL Champion for Team Golf (2006-2007)
WPIAL Section Champion-Golf (2005-06, 2006-07)
Future Problem Solving State Qualifier-(2005-2006)
President of Key Club (2006-2008)
Golf (7 years)
Track(5 years)
Piano (11 years)
Internship at the University of Pittsburgh (shadowing Doug Weber who heads the research into Neuroprosthetics) (2007-2008)
Shadowing Chief of Plastic Surgery (Guy Stofman) at Mercy Hospital (2007-2008)
North Texas Junior PGA Member (2004-2005)
Assisting with mentally challenged at school (5-10 hours a week) <<for the past 2 years</p>
<p>Target Schools:
[MIT][ UPenn][Wash U of St. Louis][Johns Hopkins][Vanderbilt][Duke][Carnegie Mellon][Georgia Tech][Penn State: Univ Park]</p>
<p>Feedback is appreciated!!! Thanks Things I can do to stand out?</p>
<p>Essay Topics
Most influential person-My nephew, he was born with a physical handicap. He has been my influence to pursue a career helping others and made me more of a humanitarian</p>
<p>Other things to talk about
Mothers battle with cancer
Only African American in my high school</p>
<p>I also think you have a extremely good chance at all those schools. Very nice extracurriculars along with Good academics and excellent GPA, combined with AA and you’re a sure in at all of them I’d say.</p>
<p>Wow! Your resume is unbelievable! That is so great! I think you will do fine. I would change the essay topic. Anyway, standing out: have you done something like a big project for someone in your community? Maybe try doing that. Gather a bunch of your friends and plan an event to help others (i.e. elderly, children).</p>
<p>I hope to get into Duke. Right now, I have started a Filipino Community Club, obviously I’m flipino and we are planning an event (a walk) to stop genocide in darfur. (i figured this is better than selling a bunch of t-shirts) We’ll have the walk then have a small ‘party’ (like a mini-concert with local talent and a barbeque.)</p>
<p>I’m hoping this will help me stand out. I’m applying to Brown as well.</p>
<p>your EC’s are terrific, and your grades/test scores are pretty good. </p>
<p>like others have said before me, you might want to avoid mentioning your nephew with the disability or mother with cancer, even though it could be a heartwarming story and good reflection upon you, because it isn’t so much about you as about your nephew/mother. If it is really meaningful to you, you could make it more of a side-note and have the majority of the essay be on how you have developed as a person. </p>
<p>If you have to write an college app essay about diversity, you could probably come up with a very innovative way of explaining your being the only African American in your high school, as long as you bring up the significance of what it means to you and how it has shaped you (and not just as a URM hook).</p>
<p>You might want to bring up your involvement in golf in a short answer or essay as well. It definitely would set you apart from the majority of applicants. Hope this helps!</p>