How does this sound?

<p>Can anyone critque my essay for me? I would really appreciate it.</p>

<p>Feel free to PM. Ill edit it for u</p>

<p>Go ahead an pm</p>

<p>I'll read it</p>

<p>Sure. PM me.</p>

<p>send a PM and I'll look at it!</p>

<p>Feel free to PM me.</p>