How realistic my fake example is? (one paragrapgh)

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<p>Assignment: Should people focus on enjoying the present moment instead of following a plan for future achievement?</p>

<p>As demonstrated by the actions of the prominent businessman,John Dickens,who works in soda production, worrying about future is tremendously unnecessary.In 2012, Most of his money was lost after a fire was set in his factory by unsatisfied employee. Unexpectedly,he reacts with aplomb to this serous situation,saying"life is the mere result of luck ".After one year, he builds another factory with what he has left from money to have one of the most lucrative careers in the middle east.Thus, John’s inconcern about the future proved to be more rational.</p>

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<p>bump</p>

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<p>Why not just go with Steve Jobs? He’s real and it’s a specific example. He’s a prominent businessman who totally had unsatisfied employees. You could go with his cancer story. And your fake example isn’t that realistic. Most people know “prominent” businessmen especially if they’re American. And a sole employee burning down a factory would’ve made the news if in fact he was prominent. When going for fake ones use ancient stuff that people will not think twice about like a centuries old army general.</p>

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<p>Burning down is a bit extreme. People don’t usually do that. Why not boycott the company?</p>

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<p>Does it really matter whether it is realistic? Its not like they will penalize you for it.</p>

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<p>@AGDC18‌ Neat logic! Btw, the story happenned in my hometown. I just faked the details and names.
@determined2300‌ Boycotting the company doesn’t seem to be as detrimental as burning the factory( I think).
@Tomato721 They would feel that your writing is devoid of scholarly examples. It doesn’t matter, but it makes the essay look better in general( I think).</p>

<p>Thanks for the responses.
It is really apreaciated!!!
:D</p>