<p>Why Penn. </p>
<p>all the closing sentences that I’ve thought of is either overused, clich</p>
<p>that’s what i said, 'therefore, i believe penn is a great place where i would be honored to attend"
i think it was fine :S</p>
<p>really? i was counting on another sentence, but considering that I spent an hour trying to think and coming up with nothing…:(</p>
<p>as a suggestion… to avoid using a word like “great” you could come up with a more poetic or professional slant for the last sentence</p>
<p>i said penn can allow me to grow as a person etc. Conclusions are the hardest parts. We probalby need to see the rest of the paragraph, but if the lat sentence is stand-alone, anything is fine.</p>
<p>my conclusion dominated:
As a student at the University of Pennsylvania, I vow to carry a piece of toast with me wherever I go, whether I am walking down Locust Walk, enjoying a Phillies game, answering that important Why?, [you’d only get that if you read my essay] three times at night (before I am early to bed), twice in the morning (after I have risen early), during my midterms, after each final, and while I am learning how to grow healthy and wise.</p>
<p>i had a real long last sentence that ended with … “as I hope to further contribute my talent and acumen to the University of Pennsylvania and ensure that Philadelphia continues to thrive.” (FURTHER MEANING IVE ALREADY CONTRIBUTED! HA!)
i was in the car today and realized that i miss penn. and it’s only been about 2 weeks since my last impromptu train trip to 30th street… : (</p>
<p>hahha don’t worry shorty u’ll be there for FOUR years (and maybe even more)</p>
<p>and josh, haha i wrote about toast too (not uncommon or nething of course)</p>
<p>dude i thought i was so original about that toast thing!</p>
<p>30th street? dont you get off at 34th? i do that when im going on the market-frank line</p>
<p>my last bit was - During my junior year in high school, I analyzed myself in terms of what type of a career I wanted; I decided that international business would be a worthwhile career for me to pursue. I recognize the talents I have in math, communication, and entrepreneurship; however, I understand that I need to convert my relatively crude natural resources into a versatile, efficient, polished product. After finding myself more and more interested in Wharton, it hit me; the Wharton Undergraduate Program will undoubtedly act as my launch pad, helping to propel me into a business world more complex and competitive than the candy-selling one could ever be. (in the beginning i wrote about how i sold tootsie rolls for a buck each in like 5th grade to my stupid classmates) <– i like doing the “come full-circle” stuff in essays</p>
<p>(i wrote a “why penn?” essay and a supplementary “why wharton?” essay (the above excerpt is the ending of the latter)…</p>
<p>I just wrote about the lee ahn and the real lee ahn foodcart and that I wanted to attend so I would know why they are right accross the street from each other</p>
<p>30th street for trains… when i feel like taking subway (which isn’t often - i am like the only person i know that really enjoys walking around the city… like last year i walked from PENNS LANDING to PENN CAMPUS and BACKKKKK so it ended up being like 90 blocks how gross is that) but yeah when i take Green line i get on/off at 37th street. which is like entrance to quad. ahhh i wish penn wasnt on break</p>
<p>i hope it’s as awesome as you’re saying it is, shorty.</p>
<p>it is awesome…i like walking around cities too (its a ukrainian thing) - i do that in europe too…when i stayed overnight at penn we walked from penn almost to the art museum - we stopped on the BF (parkway or beltway w/e it is) and it was in site…</p>