How to improve my essay? Sample inside to read.

<p>Here’s my essay from the January SAT. I was wondering what I should work on to make it better. Guess what score it received, and I’ll tell you.</p>

<p><a href=“My SAT Home Page”>My SAT Home Page;

<p><a href=“My SAT Home Page”>My SAT Home Page;

<p>Edit: The only thing I could think of is that I really stretched my examples to fit the prompt…</p>