How's this for an ending?

Colleges & Universities Brown University
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<p>“I truly believe I will succeed if I have the opportunity to study at Brown University.”</p>

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<p>hhahhaaha.</p>

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<p>that bad, huh.</p>

<p>eek. i used that line for a couple state schools.</p>

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<p>Well… It’s truly not that horrible. However, they will read that on a minimum of 10,000 applications. =P</p>

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<p>i dont think short answers are thhhat important, i mean a terrible one could keep you out i suppose</p>

<p>but people argue that its “the most important thing in the application… yeah right”</p>

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<p>Well it also might imply that you can only succeed if you go to _____ university…I don’t know if the adcoms like that.</p>

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<p>No they can’t, I would suggest changing it personally. I would like to see a applicant as someone who will succeed wherever they go, cause their just that tenacious and great, I think that’s a better side of yourself to present.</p>

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<p>The point of essay/application is to make the adcom feel you will succeed. I’m sure everyone who applies feels they could succeed there.</p>

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<p>What are your suggestions for a “winning” ending?</p>