Hows this for an essay start..

Colleges & Universities Princeton University
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<p>Grr, I’m running out of ideas and just wrote down random stuff…</p>

<p>“Who am I? I am a human. I am a male. I’m not a boy, not yet a man, and no, I am not the male version of Britney Spears. I am a musician, a scholar, a sportsman who is handsome and popular – I wish. My ideal day involves watching soccer, playing soccer on the oval, going to the beach and playing soccer, playing indoor soccer, and teaching my dog how to play soccer. I believe …”</p>

<p>Do you think it’ll work?
I just wanna write SOMETHING down!</p>

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<p>What prompt are you writing for?</p>

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<p>“Tell us about yourself in such a way that we will have a good sense of who you are.”
250 words</p>

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<p>I’m diggin’ it. But make sure you don’t just tell me who you are. SHOW who you are with some pertinent examples.</p>

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<p>Try not to be too sarcastic, and it could be a very original and effective essay.</p>

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<p>I started mine like this: “Who I am is not easy for me to say simply. Let me begin at a time when I would not have even understood the question.”</p>

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<p>i think it could work…but just don’t overdo the sarcasm. but it’s good for a beginning…catches attention.</p>

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<p>True, it’s attention catching (only the first 2 sentences), but honestly, I don’t think it’ll work. It shows “random stuff”, it doesn’t show “who you are”</p>

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<p>The Opposite of ‘show who you are’ is ‘don’t show who you are not’</p>

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<p>kinda sounds like hugh gallagher’s famous essay.</p>

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<p>i started mine with Who am I? It is not easy to answer this question…
then some crap and then i pointed out,that all of the princeton applicants are good and very much alike,so i wrote about things that make me unique…
not all the hardworking student,good athlete cliche…</p>