I desperately need someone to proofread my essay

<p>Everytime i think i’m finally done with my common app essay, it turns out that some part of it needs editing.
I hope I am really done this time.
Anyone willing to read it?</p>

<p>sure, pm it to me</p>

<p>pm me too !</p>

<p>hey me too</p>

<p>bump! anyone else?</p>

<p>To give some idea about my essay, this is the first sentence of it:
Imagine the world in only black and white. Would the world, then, be a totally tedious place due to its dearth of color?</p>