I love my 'why chicago' essay - but i dont know if my point comes across right- help?

<p>I’ve spent months trying to write the intro of this essay. i’m trying to explain through an analogy why political science in the major i chose. it’s very honest and the reasoning makes so much sense to me, but i’m afraid it won’t to other people.
can someone please please read this and tell me if they understand the point i am trying to portray?</p>

<p>hmm, sounds interesting. Pm it to me and I’ll take a look.</p>

<p>alright let me finish this one paragraph and i’ll send it to you</p>

<p>Sure, I’ll read it.
it’s an interesting concept</p>

<p>thanks! i just sent it to you too</p>

<p>I read your other thing and it was good so I won’t mind reading this either if you don’t mind reading my AEM supp essay. Also I’ve applied to chicago as well but not as a poli science major. Pm me</p>

<p>sure send it to me.</p>

<p>i’d also be willing to read anyone else’s essays who will read mine</p>

<p>desperate bumppp. i need some help tonight!</p>

<p>pm sure ill look at it</p>

<p>pm I’ll look at it and give feedback. Chicago likes “outside the box” so you’re probably fine.</p>

<p>PM it over here! Like #10 said, they’re looking for something quirky and original.</p>

<p>pm, i know chicago inside and out</p>

<p>I really would like to read your essay. I am not American and so I really would like to read some essays!</p>