I need comments on my personal essay?

College Essays
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<p>I’m writing this personal essay for the Common App, will someone read it over? No 2010-ers, please. I’d like honest criticism, “no holds barred”. Really.</p>

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<p>PM with title/prompt</p>

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<p>For anyone’s reference, it’s the “Create your own essay of choice” type of prompt, so there’s no real defined question which it’s trying to answer.</p>

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<p>allright, I give your essay my shot, yes? </p>

<p>And I got to give some props to DSI. I have no idea what the f*** your username stands for, or who you are and what you do, or why you do this, but you are always willing to read others’ essays (for free, presumably). Your efforts here, in reading and commenting alone (even if the comments sucked, which I doubt) deserve some recognition. </p>

<p>BUT, for the love of G-d, can you come up with a more creative response than “PM with title/prompt”?</p>