<p>the schools in ga that have hope use the 4.0, 3.0 etc only so if you get one C in college, you never catch up. my girlfriend has been chasing hope forever cause her school is so hard she cannot get all a’s. everyone there studies all the time and are thrilled when they get a B.</p>
<p>bump!</p>
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<p>Should I expand? Here’s some of it. Pretty random.</p>
<p>Community Service
· Helped set up Easter Egg Hunt at middle school.
· Concession stands for Kiwanis Club. Football games, soccer games, other events. Make/sell hotdogs, popcorn, candy, chips, hot cocoa, etc.
· Walk America for March of Dimes (x2)-now called March for Babies.
· Relay for Life for American Cancer Society (x2).
· Relay for Life. A third time as team captain.
· Making Strides Against Breast Cancer.
· Halloween Trick n Treat event. Helped kids cook smores. One of my favorite memories.
· Filled packages with food, water, books, etc. for soldiers in Iraq. Sealed packages, labeled packages. Put packages in truck.
· Stuffed envelopes with info about domestic violence. Distributed posters. Attended meeting at city hall.
· Volunteered at three elementary schools. Painting, picking up garbage, landscaping, moving furniture, etc.
· Cleanup of Cedar Grove Park.
· Helped local symphony with set up and tear down several times.
· Cleanup of Dash Point State Park.
· Cleanup of Todd Beamer High School. My school!
· Attended Key Club PNW district convention.</p>
<p>LOL yea. those are kinda random.</p>
<p>Did you actually put all those on your app? I did stuff like that with Interact Club, but I didn’t bother to write them all down because I barely remembered all of them. I just wrote “Interact” xD</p>
<p>Maybe I shoulda listed them… :T</p>
<p>No, I didn’t have all those on my application (there’s more too, I just thought of several that aren’t on the previous post). There’s just no place to put a lot of random little stuff. The common application itself only allows you to list about 7 major activities. I thought of putting everything into the additional info section, but I thought if I squeezed everything into that, it would look like I was boasting since this section was mostly for extrenuating circumstances etc., so I only put a few more of my most important ones. </p>
<p>Maybe I was wrong. :(</p>
<p>No, it’s fine that you didn’t list all those community service activities. Many students tend to do random community service projects as well. While it’s great that you got involved in so many things, they don’t really make you stand out because a) they’re not that time-consuming and b) other applicants do similar things.</p>
<p>I’d say you have an average chance at admission. Unfortunately, being Chinese-American won’t help you. Your SAT scores are okay. It would’ve helped to get above 700 in every subject, but I’m sure you know that. 
I can’t say that I’m the biggest fan of your essay since it doesn’t really tell me much about you as a person. It’s a nice story, and you clearly put effort into your essay, but at the end, I felt like there was something missing. Perhaps the essay would’ve been better if you wrote a different situation where you showed more growth and reflection; I felt like this essay simply told me about events that happened. I wasn’t transported into your shoes. I wasn’t deeply moved.</p>
<p>However, you are still a solid applicant. Your GPA is awesome, and I was particularly impressed by your Chess Club accomplishments. Hey, you may say that you’re in a bad league, but the person looking over your application probably won’t know that. No need to bring yourself down–present yourself as an awesome applicant!</p>
<p>Best of luck!</p>
<p>^ aawwwwww, doesn’t the story itself show who I am? No?..</p>
<p>BUMP!!! </p>
<p>Here’s another essay. It’s actually for the University of Portland Honor Program, but this is my favorite sub-forum on CC so I thought I’d put it here too. :)</p>
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<p>Is it too abstract? Too generic and common? </p>
<p>Please criticize!!! The people I showed it to at my school didn’t have much to say except that it was really good. I showed to a school counselor and she thought it was absolutely amazing; she even wanted to keep a copy. I didn’t think it was so special after reading it again.</p>
<p>But, I suppose there’s not much reason for me to worry, my profile pwns at regional universities.</p>
<p>I like this essay better than you previous one. It told me more about the kind of person you are. It’s still a little general (doesn’t go into specifics about how you changed your habits,) but as a whole, I was more interested by this one.</p>
<p>Don’t take my criticism too seriously though. After all, I’m not a published poet. You’re a solid writer and you clearly took time with these essays. It doesn’t matter if I’m the biggest fan of your essays–it only matters if the adcoms are. Try to relax until decisions come out (way easier said than done, I know!) You’ve got some good things going for you.</p>
<p>You have an okay chance. good GPA, average scores, average essays, average ECs. Honestly, your complaining about your environment not meeting your standards makes you sound a bit immature (your public school, chess division, family life, job). Hopefully that didn’t come across in your application.</p>
<p>Hmm, your SAT is a tad lower than the typical Asian applicant but regardless you’re still in the running. EC’s and GPA are fine. However I was not a fan of your essay. It wasn’t bad, but it didn’t stick out for me. The second essay you posted was SO much better than your first. It seems like two different people wrote it, to be honest. </p>
<p>But anyway, what use is my feedback? You’ll know the reality soon. Good luck.</p>