I'm new here. Looking for some feedbacks on my short essay!

College Essays
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<p>Hi I’m new here. </p>

<p>And I’ve finished my WHY essay for Ohio State University.
It’s short, only 300 words.</p>

<p>Could you please give me some advice?</p>

<p>BTW I have two main essays for Common Application, and need help too.
So if you don’t mind reading, please tell me and I’ll PM one of them to you.</p>

<p>Thanks so much!</p>

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<p>Yea sure…PM it to me if you want…will be an honest critique</p>

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<p>PM me…i’ll be happy to help</p>