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College Essays
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<p>I don’t like writing and i have hard time writing essays. So plz give me a feedback on this essay and give me advice and improvements (it have to be less than 300 words)</p>

<p>Essay I :“Seek the fashion which truly fits and befits you. You will always be in fashion if you are true to yourself, and only if you are true to yourself. You might, of course, rightly wear that style which is emblazoned on the fashion magazines of the day, or you might not.” -Maya Angelou</p>

<p>Other than fashion, what medium(s) do you choose for self-expression and why?</p>

<pre><code>Whether it is physical or emotional, self expression is essential part of life . People who don’t express themselves are difficult to understand, and they are often excluded from the society. One of the mediums people try to convey their feelings is through greeting. Greeting plays a major role in human communication & self expression. Also, greeting makes humans beings different form other species. If I am not forced to write my feeling on piece of paper, I would choose something as simple and effective as greeting.
As a teen, I believe that self expressions like greeting has a great impact in developing my personality and social life. It has shaped my physical and emotional manner. Most people take saying “hello” for granted but it actually has a positive effect on people. For me, greeting is an easy way to expresses my good feelings towards people. The difference might be the way I implement it. For instance, I don’t greet my friends the same as I do to my teachers. When I am with my friends saying a word like “what’s up” shows that I have a playful feeling towards them. Sometimes, simple greeting might be meaningless but adding a smile or gesture goes an extra mile in showing my feelings. In other words, it is a great comfort to others. When someone greets me, I often feel happy and develop positive attitude towards them.
Generally, people are different in the way they interact. Some people talk a lot while others don’t. However, I have never come across a person who doesn’t use greeting to express his/her feelings. For me it part of my every day life that makes me comfortable. Whether I am happy or sad, I pass my greeting to show how I am considerate to others.
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<p>Although I like some of the things your essay says about you, I don’t think that an essay on greeting is unique enough, I think that everyone greets other people and maybe this is not the most deep interaction. Also if you do choose to use greeting I don’t think you need the part at the begining, it generalizes the population too much and sound really formal and history-paperish. Try and make your essay a little more personal.</p>