<p>does these sentences make sense?</p>
<p>i need help with wording </p>
<p>Land of the free and home of the brave, the “New World” granted freedom to all ethnics, social classes and religions.</p>
<p>Americans were proud of their country and boasted patriotism; flaunting their country’s policies of freedom and justice.</p>
<p>It all depends what type of sentences these are…</p>
<p>Are these sentences you would use in the Essay Section…</p>
<p>Or are they sentences that appear in the multiple choice portion of the writing.</p>
<p>In the second sentence, change the semicolon to a comma…Whether you’re dealing with multiple choice or essay, that should be the way to correct the error…</p>
<p>The first sentence depends…</p>
<p>It might be better if it read …and the home of… in my opinion. I would use ethnicities instead of ethnics. The freedom wasn’t granted to the social classes or religions, but to people of all social classes, religions, and ethnicities. </p>
<p>The second one should have a comma, not a semicolon, becuase the second portion of the sentence is not a complete sentence (if it stood by itself).</p>
<p>i agree w/ cricketman, but the “and home of the…” is fine to me because of the paralleling sentence. if you were to change it, make it “The land of the free and the home of the brave,”</p>
<p>yeah, sorry. I don’t know what I was seeing. The “and home of the” part is fine.</p>