Intellectual Vitality Essay too Technical?

<p>Does somebody want to look over this short essay for me? I feel like the technical vocabulary might get in the way of understanding, but i feel like without it, my essay would be so bland.</p>

<p>Preferably not c/o 09</p>

<p>Let me take a look
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<p>No offense or anything, but I really want somebody with experience on these types of essays… I don’t know… I’m not looking for grammar editors, i’m looking for stuff beyond that…</p>

<p>I already applied to stanford early, if that helps…I could do some real spot checks for you</p>

<p>i did scea at stanford too. my essay wasnt very technical though. if you want a reader, pm me.</p>