Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, power or fame?-please grade this essay

Conscience can be defined as a person’s moral sense of right or wrong, viewed as acting as a guide to one’s behaviour.
There are many people in this there world who take important decisions in their lives based completely on their conscience.
Bhanwar Lal Doshi, known as the plastic king of India completely renowned his wealth and comfort to become a monk. This decision,he said, was completely based on his conscience. He realised that devoting himself to god is a better way of spending the rest of life than merely making money by selling plastic. It was his conscience that persuaded him to give up all his luxuries.
There are many instances when certain people pay others to do an illegal job for them. Some of these people who are paid to do this job refuse to do them. They do not agree even if the employer gives them trucks full of money or even fame. It is there conscience that does not allow them to go against their beliefs and do something despite it resulting in them losing a golden opportunity to fame.
In India during the board examinations many students, before going in for the examination, decide that they are going to cheat. These are usually wealthy people with a lot of money and power. They think that even if they get caught, their father’s can pay off the board to get them good grades in the exams. but when they finally enter the exam hall, they are, for some unknown reason, unable to muster the courage to cheat. This unknown sense that does allow them to cheat during an exam is their conscience because in their hearts and mind even they know that what they are planning to do is completely wrong. They will be going against their beliefs if they decide to go forward with what they had planned.
Thus we realise conscience, ultimately, is a more powerful motivator than money, power or fame. A stuntman in the film industry will not agree to do sky-diving if his conscience does not allow him to do so, even if he is gets a trillion dollars for it. Though he will lose his job, his fame as well as his money, atleast he will be safe. Martin luther King Jr. correctly said,“There comes a time when one must take a position that is neither safe, nor politic, nor popular, but he must take it because his conscience tells him that it is right.”

Conscience has nothing to do with this sky divibg example. There’s no moral dilemma to doing something legal & rational. The stuntman merely wants to stay alive.

Clearly, for most of the world, conscience is NOT stronger than desire for money, power, fame. Otherwise, we wouldn’t end up w pretty much the same ranking of countries every year, on Transparency International’s annual global Corruption Index list.

Good heavens, I can think of few worse major examples than india (always in the bottom half of the Corruption Index) for countries where its people routinely demonstrate principle over personal aggrandizement. Picking lack of cheating on board exams as an example is a joke when most people have this image of india testing:
http://www.bbc.com/news/world-asia-31998343

Also, minor note: you’ve used the word “renowned” when the correct word is “renounced”.

thank you for correcting my errors but could you also please grade this essay

I think it’s a bad prompt for 25 minute essay.