is my essay really that bad?

<p>hi,
i let a few people look at my essay and ive been hearing mixed opinions about it, mostly on the bad side.
so plz tell me if it’s good, bad, or moderate.
im applying to ivies so im kinda worried the essay would hurt me.
i hope it doesn’t work against me at least…
ill PM and thx for the help.</p>

<p>pm me </p>

<p>can u read mine?</p>

<p>ill read if you read mine!</p>

<p>ive sent mine to u guys so pm me back with ur essays and ill read</p>