Is my scholarship essay interesting thus far?

<p>Please message me or email me at <a href="mailto:metaqux@gmail.com">metaqux@gmail.com</a> for a copy of the first two paragraphs. Frankly, I think its the best piece I’ve ever written but then again, some may find it to be too wordy and superfluous.</p>

<p>What scholarship is your essay for?</p>

<p>Foreign Service Scholarship</p>