Is this a fair score?

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<p>So, I took the SAT reasoning test on December 3rd, 2011, and the scores were supposed to come out December 22nd, but mine were delayed. I got my scores about three hours ago. SAT has natural way of disappointing me every time; this time was not an exception. I had 2 mistakes in the Writing multiple choice section. I’m fine with that, but my essay received two 3s. Pathetic. I did not have a concluding paragraph, but I had nearly two pages written. I feel that the essay was graded unfairly. Please take a look at the essay and tell me what you think it’s worth. </p>

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<p>I don’t know dude. You spent a lot of time summarizing Tyson and Zuck instead of “analyzing” and relating them to the prompt. As for the prompt… What was it? lol. Could you post it? Here’s a site that has them listed. I don’t know which one you wrote on though.</p>

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<p>“Do people benefit more from having many choices or few choices?”</p>

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<p>Looking just at your opening paragraph, you didn’t pick a side. You have to come out and say that one is better than the other. You said that people “appreciate what they have” when they have few options and went on to say that you, Ali, and Zuck have done reckless things when given a myriad of options, but you didn’t really choose. Sure you gave a positive and a negative, but I think you have to come out and say that one is better than the other. If you had done this, it would have given you more direction and your essay from that point on would have been better.</p>

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<p>Yeah, I agree with you actually. I always feel that I shouldn’t be spoon-feeding the reader everything though, but, I guess, that’s kind of what the SAT requires. I still feel that 3s are a bit harsh. I felt that the English is this essay would actually get me a 5 or even a 6, but yeah, clarity is important.</p>

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<p>My sense is that you’re missing the point of the essay question. It’s foremost to see if you can take a specific topic, understand it, take a perspective, and prove it with clear relevant and convincing examples, and only then, if you can write with well formed sentences, adult-level vocabulary, and correct grammar. If you miss the analysis and proof aspects of the essay the writing mechanics don’t count for much.</p>

<p>Your essay is full of assertions, some unnecessarily inflammatory, that have little to do with the thesis. You need to relate each assertion to the thesis and to your perspective, and you then need to prove it with facts not opinions.</p>