<p>“I pity the person who holds back in life because they fear what others will think of them. I have never let that stop me and I never will.”</p>
<p>I think this might rub admissions the wrong way. Is it too negative?</p>
<p>anyone? please??</p>
<p>Hmmm…that could come off as condescending - not really the route you want to go. Maybe its just the wording. “Pity” seems a bit mean almost.</p>
<p>I agree, the word pity is what would be the most off-putting in this. Make the statement focus entirely on you and leave out the third party. That way it focuses on your strengths without appearing like you’re putting others down.</p>
<p>Also “the person” and “they” & “them” don’t agree – singular and plural</p>
<p>oo…it really depends on how you put it into the essay…if you reallylike it, just be yourself, because it is you who the adm wants to see</p>
<p>Yeah, I agree with everyone else in that “pity” has a slightly harsh, off-putting connotation. And also check over the subject agreement! ;D</p>
<p>I don’t mind pity as you used it, always use your own words.</p>