Is this sentence grammatically correct?

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<p>Is this sentence correct:</p>

<p>As a hopeful future Foreign Service Officer, the main thing attracting me to The George Washington University is the Elliott School of International Affairs. </p>

<p>The modifier at the beginning, does it work even though the rest of sentence after the comma doesn’t start with “I”?</p>

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<p>not correct.</p>

<p>you could write “As a hopeful future Foreign Service Officer, I am attracted to the [not The] George Washington University primarily by the Elliott School of International Affairs.”
or . . .I am especially attracted to the GWU by the"
or . . .“one of the GWU’s biggest attractions for me is the Elliott. . .”</p>

<p>is it in fact “the GWU” or “GWU”? in the case of some institutions, either is fine.</p>

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<p>or to get pickier, maybe you mean “as someone hoping to be a Foreign Service officer.”</p>

<p>You don’t mean you’re a future officer with an optimistic disposition.</p>

<p>finally, would “officer” be capitalized? i don’t believe so, but will just pose the Q.</p>

<p>or “as an aspirant to the Foreign Service . . .”</p>

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<p>Try…</p>

<p>As someone who hopes to be a foreign service officer, the main thing attracting me to The George Washington University is the Elliott School of International Affairs.</p>

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<p>Or, “I’m interested in the Elliott School of International Affairs, because I hope to be a foreign service officer.” Why mention GWU in this sentence?</p>