Is this sentence too cheesy?

College Essays
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<p>Too cheesy as an intro? Or acceptable?</p>

2

<p>“boy, was I wrong” sounds really cheesy. I’d at least take that part out, but the rest may be workable</p>

3

<p>university was not the first thought that came to mind.</p>

<p>Remove Boy at least. Otherwise fine.</p>

4

<p>**** my writing.</p>

<p>I wish they had us do a math problem</p>

5

<p>^ haha =]
I actually really like the first sentence!</p>