Jan SAT: Can you grade my essay? (Will grade yours)

<p>Hello,</p>

<p>Prompt: Do people have to be highly competitive in order to succeed?</p>

<p>In every society, success is a major goal. Whether it is the success of individuals or of a group that is at stake, success is always a prominent feeling that everyone desires. Therefore, people have different ways; establish different patterns that lead them to success. One of those patterns, the most efficient one, is by becoming tremendously competitive. History, as well as the US 2012 presidential election both succeeded brilliantly to demonstrate that being competitive is what truly leads to success.</p>

<p>As determined by the “Watergate” scandal, being competitive is necessary to earn success. In fact, the “Watergate” scandal was a political scandal that occurred in the 1970s as a result of the June 1972 break-in at the Democratic National Committee (DNC) headquarters located in the Watergate office complex, in Washington D.C and the Nixon administration’s attempted cover-up of its involvements after being clearly denounced by two journalists of the Washington Post, a newspaper. The scandal eventually lead to the resignation of the US president Richard Nixon on August 9, 1974; the only resignation of a US president. Therefore, the scandal showed us that Nixon’s administration had to be competitive - by breaking-in the DNC - in order to face its opponents, the Democrats, with success.</p>

<p>Moreover, during the US 2012 presidential election, the success of the two major candidates who were participating in the race was brilliantly emphasized by each of the candidates’ proper party. In fact, the Democrats praised the success of Barack Obama while the Republicans argued about the talent of their candidate; the businessman Mitt Romney. Thus, through the will of both the Republicans and the Democrats to make success an extremely valuable quality that their proper candidate holds, one can clearly observe how highly competitive the two parties were and how they placed competitiveness at the core of the process to gain success; at the core of the election victory.</p>

<p>After a careful analysis of the “Watergate” scandal and the US 2012 presidential race, one can clearly say that indeed the quality of being highly competitive is prominent in order to succeed. Had the political figures in the examples stated not been extremely competitive, they would have never reached the success and the fame they reached.</p>

<p>Thanks,</p>

<p>It’s a 3/4 split (more like a three than a four) mainly because the word “competitive” (or some form thereof) appears too many times.</p>

<p>It’s also very heavy on fact and relatively light on analysis.</p>