<p>The PROMPT was :
“does progress or improvement usually involve setbacks or a significant problem?”</p>
<p>My THESIS:
Improvement does involve problems in that from major setbacks and problems, one is able to re-assess and execute properly to adapt and improve for the better of a future.
(setbacks->improvement)</p>
<p>Examples:
I talked about how setbacks Russia sustained during WW1 turned the society into a poverty stricken land with destroyed economy, WHICH allowed Lenin to gain popularity and form Marxist regime, bringing relief and economic equality with his NEP and disintegration of social stratification. (setback->improvement for society)</p>
<p>AND: I talked about how despite Pip in Great Expectations advanced through the social hierarchy, he faced a personal crisis of wealthiness (setback), which enabled him to adapt and IMPROVE his identity for the future. (setback-> improvement for personal growth)</p>
<p>HOWEVER few people have been criticizing me saying that I WROTE OFF TOPIC, and should have been talking about how (improvement->setback). People review the original prompt and my examples and update me on your opinions whether this essay is valid. (I used up all 2 pages of the essay)</p>
<p>THIS IS A TIME SENSITIVE ISSUE BECAUSE IF MAJORITY BELIEVES MY ESSAY IS NOT VALID AND TOO OFF-TOPIC I HAVE TO CANCEL IT IN 2 DAYS. </p>
<p>PLEASE HELP! I"VE BEEN DYING THESE LAST COUPLE OF HOURS :(</p>
<p>The simplest interpretation of the assignment is that “in the journey to success there are inevitable bumps, that these bumps need to be overcome, and that the process of overcoming them is an important part of the journey”.</p>
<p>My sense is that you are generally on topic. You state your interpretation of the thesis and your position, and then you proceed to prove it. In the first example your case would be clearer if you define Russia’s goals upfront (i.e. what does “success” mean for the Russian people?) – before your bring up WWI. For your second example “success” to Pip means personal advancement. You make that clear. You then prove your point.</p>
<p>@Fogcity</p>
<p>I definitely proved my point very explicitly in my essay.
What I posted above was just the brief overview of it.</p>
<p>You do think It’s ON TOPIC right? and does address the prompt adequately?</p>
<p>The PROMPT was :
“does progress or improvement usually involve setbacks or a significant problem?”</p>
<p>yet people are saying the “RIGHT” way should have been addressing that progress leads to problems rather than vice-versa the way I did.</p>
<p>What’s your take on this?</p>
<p>No worries its not off topic</p>
<p>Are you 100% sure that’s the question? Because if it is, then you’re probably good</p>
<p>Oh and ithink u should thimk of fetting 10 or higher =)
Cheers!!</p>
<p>No, you’re definitely on-topic. I would say your friends’ interpretation of the prompt is what sounds a bit sketchy.</p>