<p>Hello everyone,</p>
<p>I am almost done with my CommonApp essay. I just need to shorten it a little bit (it’s 2 pages long, double-spaced). I need some critique. Please note, I moved to the US 3 years ago and my essay is not like one of those “Best 71 essays that got students admitted to Yale” (What I’m trying to say is that my vocabulary is not as big). In addition to that, I’m not a writer, I’m more of an engineer/math type person. I don’t like writing, but I did my best here. </p>
<p>As one of the CC’iers said, “My conscience says no 2015ers. Sorry!” (c) :)</p>
<p>I’ll PM anyone who is willing to help me out.</p>