<p>Okay, so it’s my first essay and it’s really personal and I really want some critical incite on it. Don’t worry, you can be rough on it; I’m a big boy, I can handle it. Just ask for a PM of it!</p>
<p>send it my way and ill try to give you some advice</p>
<p>Thanks for the tips swim! Anyone else wanna take a look at my essay?</p>