Lousy, fake-sounding essay?

Applying to College
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Hey, I would really appreciate if I could have some people read my essay. I personally am not happy with it, but my dad likes it…I’d appreciate some more opinions. It is answering the common app prompt that includes ethical dilemmas, which is what my essay’s supposed to be about…Tell me if my opinion that it’s a fake-sounding essay is true…

If anyone’s interested, they can post their email address

Mine’s <a href="mailto:jpkbaker@comcast.net">jpkbaker@comcast.net</a> if anyone wants to send me theirs to critique

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<p>oh yes and if you do email me your essay, put it directly in the email, since I cannot open attachments…</p>

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<p>Hey, you want to exchange essays? </p>

<p>I’d like some critique on my essay as well, and I’ll gladly critique yours. I’ll email you later tonight. My email is <a href="mailto:Dusk2k2■■■■■■.com">Dusk2k2■■■■■■.com</a> in case you want to send yours to me now.</p>