May you please read the first draft of my essay?

<p>Before you ask me to send it to you, you must understand that I have trouble even calling this a first draft. It has not even reached the length of a page double-spaced, and well, it’s pretty horrendous. I wrote it in about a half hour and proof-read it once, so there are probably going to be some weird sentences. Can I have some suggestions though? Whether it be how to expand it, or to simply scrap the whole idea, which I might actually do. Writing is by far my biggest weakness.</p>

<p>I’ll PM you the topic and my essay if you ask for it.</p>

<p>By the way the required length for the essay is a page, I’m not sure if the school wants it double-spaced or not.</p>

<p>I tried to fix it a little. I shortened it so it’s going to need two or three more paragraphs now but I’m stuck and I really need help, please!!! This is for Georgetown by the way, my top choice so I’m really overthinking every sentence which isn’t helping.</p>

<p>Send it over :)</p>