My common app essay...can someone take a look?

<p>If anyone has the time, may you look over my common app essay and make some criticism. Thanks!</p>

<p>I can read it :) PM me, but give me at least a day to reply back</p>

<p>I need more opinions........greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>I can read it well and if possible, could you read mine as well?</p>