My Common App Essay to UPenn

College Essays
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<p>My AP Lit teacher said it was beautiful and well written.
My mom said that she almost cried.</p>

<p>It’s 890 words long, but everybody tells me it’s a very easy to read piece.
I’ve been trying to shorten it, but since this is personal, its a bit hard. It’s readable in under 4 minutes, so I don’t think Adcoms would mind because its concise.</p>

<p>Anyone up to read and critique it?
I’d prefer non 09ers, but if you are, then I’d just want you to have a decent amount of posts :)</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>I could take a read
<a href="mailto:eugene.bang@yahoo.com">eugene.bang@yahoo.com</a></p>

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<p>Hey I’m an 09er but I’d be glad to take a look and offer feedback. PM me :slight_smile:
Btw, I won’t be applying to Penn.</p>

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<p>hey i can give you some comments. wont be applying to upenn</p>

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<p>Hi, are you applying UPenn EA?</p>

<p>I’d love to read your essay!</p>

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<p>I’d be more than happy to evaluate and critique your essay. Just send me a PM.</p>

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<p>PM it to me - I’d be happy to help.</p>

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<p>PM to me…ill read it</p>

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<p>i’ll be glad to read it.</p>

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<p>I already finished my common app essay and am applying Stanford EA; if you feel comfortable, I’d be glad to help you out.</p>

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<p>I’d love to help you out, just PM it to me :)</p>

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<p>I’d love to help you. Class of 2010</p>

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<p>I’d love to read it.</p>

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<p>I am a 0’9er but I had taken a gap year. I am applying RD but most probably not to penn. I assume you are sending an ED application so it shouldn’t really matter. I would be glad to critique your essay.</p>

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<p>Sure, PM it over.</p>

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<p>Bear in mind that adcomms will give your essays about 2 minutes each…not 4…</p>

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<p>I heard it was more than that, like each app at an Ivy gets approximately 30 minutes per person, per adcom (and usually one adcom re-reads each app twice).</p>

<p>Sent out, any more?</p>

<p>P.S. This is a personal essay, and I’m still trying to edit the conclusion to sound more fluid, but yeah.
P.S. I don’t mind critiquing anybody elses essays, so just send them my way.</p>

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<p>Yes for the entire application…the essays only get a fraction of that time.</p>

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<p>Send it over!</p>

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<p>wow it sounds amazing. i’d love to read it if you’d pm me. i’m not applying to penn anymore btw, my top choice right now is wellesley=) </p>

<p>oh yeah, if you could return the favor and critique one of my essays, i really would appreciate it!</p>