My essay

Colleges & Universities Stanford University
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<p>my essay. Although I am finished with apps, Please critique my why stanford essay.</p>

<p>The car hovered down the smooth serene road as I peered into the surroundings. I was on my way to Stanford. It was August 16,2010 and I was elated to visit the University where inquisitive students congregate. As I stepped out of the car the fresh breeze sparked my fancy. I was home. The Stanford representative began the information seminar with an anecdote. He provided an insightful interpretation of his own life,raised in a small town he was able to attend Stanford. I was immediately attached to the University and what it had to offer. I have placed the pieces of my life’s puzzles throughout but I am missing one. Stanford compliments my life. Although Stanford is a paradox because it is both big and small-it provides a close knit community while being the largest university in America. I long for that community and life.The Stanford air illuminates the close knit atmosphere of the University. I was simply amazed,its bright colors, its awe aspiring size,its contributions in the world,its students. Stanford is not just a university but a sanctuary, an institution that foster the inquisitive nature that is inherent in Stanford students. Stanford is the only university that completes my search.</p>

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<p>Ill be honest I’m not a fan. It really says nothing about why you want to attend. I applied REA and got deferred and I focused in on a few key programs despite an overarching metaphor</p>

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<p>I think you give a really good description of your first encounter with Stanford, which is very personal. I’m hesitant to be critical but I agree with the above poster–in this essay, you didn’t explain what you would pursue or what you would add to the campus community in this essay. But who knows, I’m not an admissions counselor! best of luck. if you love it, thats the only thing that matters!</p>

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<p>I think it’s a good description but it’s too generalized. I believe a lot of applicants talked about how great Stanford was but didn’t go into great details why and what it had to do with the applicant. I feel that it’s too abstract and overly methaphorific (I’m sure that’s not a word xD).</p>

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<p>Thanks, Are there anymore. Please Reply.</p>

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<p>Oh stop fretting. You already submitted anyways</p>

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<p>Yeah nothing you can do it’s in God’s hands now.</p>

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<p>^God=adcom? Lol.</p>

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<p>^Well no but you can read it that way if you want.</p>