<p>Hi everyone! I was wondering what you thought of my short answer about my most meaningful extra curricular… thanks! ps:this is a rough draft, and can be totally redone if needed…</p>
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<p>The most meaningful of my extracurricular activities is my participation in the Close Up: Washington DC Program. Not only did I have the fortune to meet people from every part of the Country, but I also had the opportunity to see our countrys seat of government. The elegant pillars of the Supreme Court. The immaculately manicured lawn of the White House. All these landmarks captivated me and left me in awe of the most magnificent city on earth. It left me with the knowledge of how my country is run as well as by whom it is. The directors of the program, in addition to the various guest speakers, stressed civil duty as the foundation of our government. A true democracy cannot be if the people do not elect it, and so the burden falls on us: the citizens, with whom all power is trusted, and all responsibility is absolved.</p>
<p>How long were you involved in this program? What other extracuricular activities
have you been involved in for a significant period of time? If this was a very short-term activity, you might want to consider something that you have been committed to for a longer period of time.</p>
<p>After reading your short response, I am left wondering what precisely did your extracurricular program entail. Generally, your answer should covey to the reader, who, what, where, and most importantly why. What impact did this program have on you as an individual.</p>
<p>First off, try to cut down some of that language. You don’t need to use fancy words to prove a point, since most of the time they just hinder your argument. You’ve already impressed them with your verbal on the SAT, so talk about yourself and how it impacted you personally. You also didn’t talk much about the program itself as much as what it entails. Describe a typical day, but make it wonderful.</p>
<p>im not trying to be mean or anything, but the opening line doesnt really keep me focused…it just restates the question, and it sounds like an opening line that hundreds of applicants are going to use…and this doesn’t really say too much about what you did…you talk about DC being a wonderful city and democracy being important, but how does that affect you personally?</p>
<p>When you say that DC is the most magnificent city on earth, you don’t really sound open-minded and a as person with a broad knowledge of the world. There’s more to “earth” (as you put it) than the US, you know. It’s just one of over two hundred countries.</p>