My Motivation Letter for international Business management

College Essays
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<p>Is there anything else I should add ?
Thank you in advance :)</p>

<p>The Awareness of being a citizen of one of the countries with the highest unemployment in the world has never satisfied me. I have always tried to bring some changes to my Motherland but my impacts have only laid in the small corners of my town. My dream to improve Turkmenistan made me follow the path to the BSEL with its strong systems to inducing leadership and intellectuality in every student.
I have been interested in business and international relations as long as I can remember, and have enjoyed studying languages, travelling, learning different cultures. A successful International Business Management degree will provide me an excellent foundation for a career in companies and organizations active in an international environment.
Moreover the BSEL offers a pleasant, modern atmosphere that is ideal for studying. I can’t think of a better place to pursue a major in Business management than the BSEL. Also it’s highly recognition on international level is another advantage for me. Partnership of the BSEL with 156 universities worldwide and close relationship with the business world with over 480 companies promises me more diversity of the student body and internship in big companies. From which I could get a valuable experience that would benefit my future.
Not only do the courses sound fascinating, but it is my dream to live in cosmopolitan and international city like Berlin. With it’s unlike wealth of traditions and culture, as I learned from my last month trip.
As a result of the events in my life, leadership has quickly become my primary goal. I am extremely interested in pursuing and developing all of the skills required reaching this goal, and The BSEL will give me an excellent opportunity for that.</p>

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<p>You need to flip your statement. You need to show what YOU can bring to the table of international business instead of what international business can do you for.</p>

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<p>what do you mean by saying “hat YOU can bring to the table of international business” its not like a math or something you cant really bring anything for IBM ? i can bring something to their university or to the certain company or my country for example as i mentioned.</p>

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<p>I mean your personal statement is just 1 step above straight out begging for admission. “A Business degree will provide me a career in companies” (snip)." A) that is obvious; a degree will help a career. B) Just because a degree will help your career doesn’t mean THIS university should accept you. </p>

<p>Your letter needs to sell yourself. You need to talk about qualifications, experience, etc, basically anything that shows why you deserve a spot over the 1000 of other people applying.</p>

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<p>Here’s an idea. You say, “As a result of the events in my life, leadership has quickly become my primary goal.” Why don’t you have your essay be an explanation of this sentence. Provide detail about these events, how they affected you, how they changed you, how all this felt to you during the change and after. Show us who you are through this story, ideally demonstrating strong character or something else that would make you an asset to BSEL. In addition, you will need some significant help with grammar and word usage. If possible, try to incorporate bomerr’s advice above about qualifications and experience, but make sure you’re humble when selling yourself.</p>