My revised essay, anyone wants to take a look?

College Essays
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<p>I have changed my essay based on the numerous constructive criticism that I have received and I wac and I do not really care if you are in high school or not as long as you can s wondering if anyone else would want to take another look at it. Again, I am still writing about the same topigive great critique. </p>

<p>Reply if you are interested and can probably critique the essay in a relatively short time. <em>I don’t want to interrupt other’s schoolwork or wait a month later to get a rather meaningless PM</em></p>

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<p>i’ll revise it.</p>

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<p>I can take a look, and will give you back my advice in early Oct.</p>

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<p>I’ll help you revise it</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a look, also.</p>