Need a stern editor for my short answer activity essay

<p>Any opinions and critics are welcome
I don’t really have any accessible qualified readers
shouldn’t take to long, it’s only 200 words
Post if your willing to take a look
Thanks for any help</p>

<p>btw, I went 50 words over the 150 word limit, will they crucify me?
Background info:
I go to a catholic boarding school in Arkansas (not one of those expensive eastern schools, trust me)
Not a whole lot of opportunities for ec up here, have been involved in virtually everything there is to do</p>