<p>Who wants to help me</p>
<p>I also need raters</p>
<p>Sure I’ll help.
Just do me a favor and tell me the main idea you’re trying to express so I can start editing out the parts that don’t contribute to the topic.</p>
<p>bump</p>
<p>…</p>
<p>ill take a look at it and try to give you some good feedback :)</p>
<p>I can take a look</p>
<p>bumping is fun</p>
<p>I can def take a look. I hope you don’t mind harsh criticism.</p>
<p>bump</p>
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<p>PM me. I will critique/suggest changes .</p>
<p>The thread title suggests you’ve got the same essay for HYPS and Oxford, in which case it’s going to be seriously unfit for purpose for one or the other. The Oxford essay needs to be tightly focused on the subject you are applying to study. For example, you should only mention ECs if they relate to that subject. The sort of streams of consciousness I’ve seen on some college essays posted on College Discussion would go straight in the bin.</p>
<p>lol i was kind of kidding that it was for HYPS/Oxford just to attract some attention</p>
<p>It’s my commonapp essay though</p>
<p>??? are you not applying to HYPS/Oxford at all then???</p>
<p>nope lol</p>
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