<p>I decided to scrap my first essay attempt, and I feel better about this one. It is the prompt about a place that makes you feel content, and I chose my local bowling alley. It is a little long, and there are a couple parts I don’t know whether I should keep or not. If anyone is interested in reading it I would be very grateful.</p>
<p>I can read it.</p>
<p>I can read it!</p>
<p>Il read it. Message me.</p>
<p>I’m not an expert on college essays and have little experience with them myself however one thing I am sure about is that colleges are trying to paint a picture of you from your essay. Your essay was well written and cohesive however I didn’t really learn much about you from the essay; a picture of you was not drawn in my mind. Think about that. But your in a good starting point.</p>
<p>Love it! Anything with truth and passion backed up by good prose will make for a good essay. GL</p>
<p>not to be totally ignorant or anything but I didn’t know the common app was out yet? Is it ?</p>
<p>@newyorker96: yes, the common app prompts were released in February.</p>
<p>Btw, I can read your essay.</p>
<p>@yangmaster thanks so much - will get back to you since I’ll be working on it this week</p>
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<p>Only if it is revealing about the writer… the college doesn’t care about those other things unless the essay tells them more about you. Lots of people make that mistake.</p>