no idea what to do with this essay

<p>hey everyone, this is my first post (although i’ve always been cruisin the forums)</p>

<p>anyways, I started this essay (its from the common app) but I have no idea where to go from where I am. I have some ideas but I don’t know how to incorporate them.</p>

<p>It also probably has a lot of errors and I also don’t think the opening is catching enough</p>

<p>so if someone could please read it and give me their feedback, i’d appreciate it. :]</p>

<p>i will read yours. email it to me. <a href="mailto:tyac.sg@gmail.com">tyac.sg@gmail.com</a></p>