Non-essential details in essays

College Essays
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<p>I’m editing one of my supplement essays, and I have some non-essential details in it, and I was wondering, are they a beneficial addition to the essay that will add depth, or are they a distraction from the main idea?</p>

<p>Basically what happens in this essay is I go to watch the rodeo, and I talk about my thoughts on it. I have I think 3 different sentences where I mention that I had a book with me, one where I say what I was reading, and that I was such a bookworm that I had to bring it with me, and then another where I talked about how I tried to fit in a few pages before the rodeo started.</p>

<p>So, what do you think? Keep or delete?</p>

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<p>Delete. Keep those three ideas in one same sentence “I was trying to read my book on X topic before the rodeo started, being a bookworm that’s what I do.” (ofc something more polished than that, you get my point). Keep your sentences short and concise.</p>