Objective feedback needed on MIT essays

<p>Hello! I'd really like honest, objective, brutal (if needed) feedback on my essays for MIT. I think they're a bit weird, but I like them. I just want to see what a stranger can glean about my personality from these essays, and if he/she would admit me. Please PM me if you'd like to help me.</p>

<p>If you PM me I can take a look :]</p>