Opening transfer essay lead capture your attention?

College Essays
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<p>The essay is about diversity and human relations are related to my major. It seems forlorn, no doubt, but I think I can effectively lead the conversation in the direction I want it to go it, namely, diversity:</p>

<p>"Let’s say that sometime in the 3rd century a Japanese warrior and a Mayan priest run into each other on a hitherto uninhibited Pacific island. How would the situation play out? "</p>

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<p>uninhabited, not uninhibited</p>

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<p>Oh… haha, silly of me. Thanks.</p>

<p>Damn, still won’t let me edit posts. It just says “Report Problem Post Reply”</p>

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<p>It captured my attention?</p>